Struktur på min academic writing

Jag tänkte typ: 

Introduktion: att jag ska skriva om dessa reklam som visar fattiga barn som syr kläder åt fabriker, och kritisera läsaren genom att fråga frågor som: Then why do you still buy cheaper clothes? 

Och sedan tänkte jag ta och skriva min thesis statment. 

I paraghraferna så bör topic sentances handla om:

1. Why is it ethiclly wrong? What does the company do?

- supporting idé: Low payment

- supporting idé: Bad environment + healthrisky

- supporting idé: injustice labor for kids

2. What's the problem and why can't it be solved? Why can't the goverment take care of it? And the solution:

- supporting idé: The auditors are in the act

- supporting idé: The comapnies got smarter, they make 2 books (rules)

- supporting idé: The company makes several other companies work for them in secret so nobody knows where the items come from. 

3. So why do we still buy cheap items?

- supporting idé: they are cheap

- supporting idé: we can't resist the shiny items

- supporting idé: the poor live in a low-cost city so it's ok with low payment. 

4. Solution

- supporting idé: Write and talk about it

- supporting idé: stop buying

5. Ending

Thesis statement + sammanfattning av alla stycken (1, 2, 3 och 4). 

Är det en bra struktur???? Vill ha hjälp så snabbt som möjligt.