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Postad: 16 maj 2018

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Michael Jackson or Michael Joseph Jackson  is the history's most famous and loved singer.

Michael Jackson was born 29 august 1958 in Gary in Indiana in USA and died 25 juni 2009 in Los Angeles.

Michael Jackson is the history's most famous and loved singer. He was also a dancer, songwriter and an author. He wrote much about depression, and sold about 10 million copies of his books. And about his dance, he was very popular for his moondance, the robot and the spin.


Jackson was also an avid reader, but he allegedly owned a library for $1 million dollar. The library agreed to drop the fines if overdue books were returned autographed.

He started his career with his brothers the Jackson 5 but after 7 years he sang solo while still a member of the group.

He produced a number of the world's best-selling music albums ever and he got called for The King of Pop.

The Thriller album is the world's best-selling album through the ages of between 65 and 105 million sold copies. By 2003, he held $200 million in debt, but even that wasn't enough to break him.


Michael jackson has 3 kids who livs. Both his parents also livs and he has 10 brothers and sisters, one of them is dead and the others are alive. Michael Jackson was married to Lisa-Marie Presley between 1994-1996. That is, Elvis Presley's daughter.


In 2005 one of Michael Jackson's brother (Marlo Jackson) was trying to kill him after a meet at his brothers house. Lucky Michael Jackson did not get stabbed on any organ.The reason was that Michael did not pay the debt he would give to his brother. But it turned out Marlo was also drunk. Marlo was imprisoned in 8 years but came out from prison 2013.


In 1988, Michael opened his theme park called Neverland Ranch. The name came from the fantasy island in the story of Peter Pan. In the park there are 50 rides and a roller coaster.

In 1993, Michael Jackson was charged with sexual assault on Jordy Chandler inside his theme park. Jordy Chandler was friend with Michael Jackson 1992-1993. Jordy's parents accused him, and Michael had to pay 20 million dollars.

After that he has to take away his entire park. then the white house was built with the money Michael Jackson paid off his debt.


Another rare facts about  Michael Jackson is that he had a oxygen bed. He slept on it to live longer. According to him, he donated a million dollars to a foundation who bought the bed.


Jackson died unexpectedly and quickly on June 25, 2009 at the age of 50 in his rented property in Los Angeles. He took an overdose of anesthetics, and could not wake up. This short time before his comeback and what he said would be his last concert. The artist, charged with sexual assault against children but released, had pictures with babies and young children in his bedroom. Michael also had many porcelain dolls under his bed.

Michael had many unbelievable things and many weird things for exempel he never let cleaners clean the room because he wants to hide that it stank and he did not want to tell why.

The authors Matt Richards and Mark Langthorne have in their new book called 83 minutes The Doctor, the Damage, and the Shocking Death of Michael Jackson and that was about Michael's last 83 minutes.

 

 

 

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Postad: 16 maj 2018 Redigerad: 16 maj 2018

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Michael Jackson or Michael Joseph Jackson is the history's most famous and loved singer.

Michael Jackson was born 29 august (August) 1958 in Gary in Indiana in USA (the USA) and died 25 juni (June) 2009 in Los Angeles.

Michael Jackson is the history's most famous and loved singer. He was also a dancer, songwriter and an author. He wrote much about depression, and sold about 10 million copies of his books. And about his dance, he was very popular for his moondance, the robot and the spin.


Jackson was also an avid reader, but he allegedly owned a library for $1 million dollar (dollars). The library agreed to drop the fines if overdue books were returned autographed.

He started his career with his brothers the Jackson 5 but after 7 years he sang solo while still a member of the group.

He produced a number of the world's best-selling music albums ever and he got called for The King of Pop.

The Thriller album is the world's best-selling album through the ages of between 65 and 105 million sold copies. By 2003, he held $200 million in debt, but even that wasn't enough to break him.


Michael jackson (Jackson) has 3 kids who livs (lives). Both (Both of …) his parents also livs and he has 10 brothers and sisters, one of them is dead and the others are alive. Michael Jackson was married to Lisa-Marie Presley between 1994-1996. That is, Elvis Presley's daughter.


In 2005 one of Michael Jackson's brother (Marlo Jackson) was trying to kill him after a meet at his brothers (brother's) house. Lucky Michael Jackson did not get stabbed on any organ.The reason was that Michael did not pay the debt he would give to his brother. But it turned out Marlo was also drunk. Marlo was imprisoned in 8 years but came out from prison 2013.


In 1988, Michael opened his theme park called Neverland Ranch. The name came from the fantasy island in the story of Peter Pan. In the park ( In the park, …) there are 50 rides and a roller coaster.

In 1993, Michael Jackson was charged with sexual assault on Jordy Chandler inside his theme park. Jordy Chandler was friend with Michael Jackson 1992-1993. Jordy's parents accused him, and Michael had to pay 20 million dollars.

After that (After that, …) he has to take away his entire park. then the white house was built with the money Michael Jackson paid off his debt.


Another rare facts (fact) about Michael Jackson is that he had a (an) oxygen bed. He slept on it to live longer. According to him, he donated a million dollars to a foundation who bought the bed.

 

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Postad: 17 maj 2018
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Hej!

Fin text. Jag har läst hela men tänker att det vore lite fel att rentav rätta hela texten utan att ge dig ett försök. Därför har jag gjort korrigeringar för ca 70 % av texten, i hopp om att du även lär dig av feedbacken och inte direkt lämnar in texten utan att studera punkterna nedan.

 

Michael Jackson or Michael Joseph Jackson is the history's most famous and loved singer.

Michael Jackson was born 29 august (August) 1958 in Gary in Indiana in USA (the USA) and died 25 juni (June) 2009 in Los Angeles.

Michael Jackson is the history's most famous and loved singer. He was also a dancer, songwriter and an author. He wrote much about depression, and sold about 10 million copies of his books. And about his dance, he was very popular for his moondance, the robot and the spin.


Jackson was also an avid reader, but he allegedly owned a library for $1 million dollar (dollars). The library agreed to drop the fines if overdue books were returned autographed.

He started his career with his brothers the Jackson 5 but after 7 years he sang solo while still a member of the group.

He produced a number of the world's best-selling music albums ever and he got called for The King of Pop.

The Thriller album is the world's best-selling album through the ages of between 65 and 105 million sold copies. By 2003, he held $200 million in debt, but even that wasn't enough to break him.


Michael jackson (Jackson) has 3 kids who livs (lives). Both (Both of …) his parents also livs and he has 10 brothers and sisters, one of them is dead and the others are alive. Michael Jackson was married to Lisa-Marie Presley between 1994-1996. That is, Elvis Presley's daughter.


In 2005 one of Michael Jackson's brother (Marlo Jackson) was trying to kill him after a meet at his brothers (brother's) house. Lucky Michael Jackson did not get stabbed on any organ.The reason was that Michael did not pay the debt he would give to his brother. But it turned out Marlo was also drunk. Marlo was imprisoned in 8 years but came out from prison 2013.


In 1988, Michael opened his theme park called Neverland Ranch. The name came from the fantasy island in the story of Peter Pan. In the park ( In the park, …) there are 50 rides and a roller coaster.

In 1993, Michael Jackson was charged with sexual assault on Jordy Chandler inside his theme park. Jordy Chandler was friend with Michael Jackson 1992-1993. Jordy's parents accused him, and Michael had to pay 20 million dollars.

After that (After that, …) he has to take away his entire park. then the white house was built with the money Michael Jackson paid off his debt.


Another rare facts (fact) about Michael Jackson is that he had a (an) oxygen bed. He slept on it to live longer. According to him, he donated a million dollars to a foundation who bought the bed.

 

Jag har ju inte fått ta del av instruktionen till uppgiften, därför blir det svårt för mig att rätta texten rent innehållsmässigt, men du har säkert bra koll på detta.

Om du har konkreta frågor vad gäller min feedback eller andra språkliga frågor så får du gärna posta dem, så försöker jag (eller någon annan) att besvara eventuella otydligheter :)

 

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