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Abdullahi Nor 2
Postad: 20 okt 20:57

jag behöver hjälp kan någon rätta min text eller betygsätta den?

                 Freedom


Freedom can be defined as having the ability and resources to fulfill one's purpose  without hinder.


There are different types of freedom like freedom of the press, freedom to choose one's state in life, freedom of religion. 

With freedom of association is that everyone is free to organas, participate or join any kind of association. Freedom of belief is to have the right thing freely, and to express ideas and hold positions based on conscience or religious or other beliefs. Freedom of the express is the freedom to every person to say what they think and believe of their political and ideological positions.

On the other hand freedom of press is to have the right to write and publish ideas without any hindrance or censorship.


In my opinion freedom is feeling free when someone wants to express their ideas and to live according theire what of lif. Nobody has the right to judge or to influence other persons to end their way of life. No offoranty or group has the right to dictate other groups of persons or socrates to flow a specific way of life or limit the righets to believe or think what they want. 

 

Politically freedom means to participate in any political party or organization which does not stand against democracy. It also means to have the freedom to criticize political leaders without fear of being persined or jailed. Minority groups have to have posopelits to practice their cultural, language and  religious activities.


When one needs to feel free not to be feared  to be imprisoned or killed for the sake of it is opinion and belief. On the other hand freedom needs to be to everyone in the scosaty without excluding any group of people or individuals in the society.


Freedom Is important  for society because it is the strongest democracy and creativity of all individuals in the society. It helps against  dictatorship and civil war in the countries.


In Sweden society, freedom is the basic notion which each person must understand. Freedom is our Swedish dream and it was never connected with material things. It is our freedom and freedom of our nation and we should never forget it.


Finally, we can sum it up by saying that freedom is not what we think. It's a concept, and everyone has their opinion on it. If we see the idea of ​​freedom more broadly, it is connected with happiness. In the same way, it has an added value for other people.Freedom Is extremely important for our society because it is the strongest democracy and creativity of all individuals in the society. It helps against  dictatorship and civil war in the countries.

Tinnell 7
Postad: 20 okt 21:33

Hej! några råd är att skriva:

"In Swedish society" istället för "in Sweden society"

Skriv  "To summarize, freedom is a concept..."(att du börjar sammanfatta direkt och tar bort pratighet)alltså, istället för att inleda avslutningen med "Finally, we can sum it up by saying that freedom is not what we think". Ett annat gott råd är att minska på antalet stycken i texten, kolla att stor bokstav ENDAST är i början av en mening eller i namn. Kolla även på om du kan hitta synonymer till de mest förekommande orden såsom society och freedom som upprepas. Detta gör det skönare för läsaren och ger ett mer varierat språk. Lycka till!:)

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