Kan man skriva så här i en argumenterande text om att man kan ha roligt utan alkohol
Är detta ok att skriva i en argumenterande uppsats eller känns det mer som en diskuterande?
For example, imagine there is Midsummer Eve, a family party where friends and relatives meet and socialize. They playing games and having fun. The grown ups start to drink and becoming increasingly loud. After a while they start to talk incoherently. They repeat everything they say and move diffenently. Some of them may start to argue about something and maybe it will be a fight. The children are no longer in the center.
Now, pretend you are one of those children who see their parents behave like this.
How would you feel? Confused, ignored or afraid? Sertenly not happy.
According to C.A.N as many as 320 000 children in Swedan are negatively affected by their parents drinking today ( www.can.se ). Many of them experience anxiety every weekend. Just like I wrote before, they dont know how the affect of alcohol turns out.
Jag skulle skriva såhär istället:
For example, imagine Midsummer Eve. A family gathering where friends and relatives get together and socialize. Everybody's playing games and having fun, until the grown ups start drinking. They get increasingly loud and after a while it has gotten to the point where they can no longer speak coherently. Some start to argue and some of these arguments lead to fights. The children are no longer the center of attention.
Now enter the mind of one of these children.
How would you feel? Confused? Ignored? Afraid? Certainly not happy.
According to C.A.N as many as 320 000 children in Sweden alone are negatively affected by their parents drinking today (www.can.se). Many of these experience anxiety every weekend. Just like I previously stated, they do not understand the effects of alcohol.
Lita inte blint på mig däremot. Är endast en elev. Jag var dessutom tvungen att tolka din text efter vad du skrev här. Fick inte hela sammanhanget.
Hoppas att det hjälper.
Tusen tack för ditt svar, det där lät mycket bättre.
Men det funkar alltså som en argumenterande text?
Madde77 skrev:Tusen tack för ditt svar, det där lät mycket bättre.
Men det funkar alltså som en argumenterande text?
Ja, det du skriver visar ju tydligt en negativ aspekt av alkoholanvändning. Så om det är alkoholanvändning du vill argumentera mot i detta stycke så fungerar det absolut.
