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elemea77 7
Postad: 10 apr 2020

Report, hjälp!!

Hej alla där ute som erbjuder hjälp!

Jag håller på och skriver en report på engelska och undrar om jag har skrivit rätt den här texten. 

Tack i förhand!

There are a lot of tips how to reduce anxiety and protect your mental health during the pandemic. For those people who can´t handle it or focus on something else might need extra support. It´s never a good choice to suicide or affect people around you or your own health. For my part, it is important if someone reaches out to you, listen and take it seriously. You may have an important role to her/his mental health. We all can do something. It´s important when mind start move into overthinking or panic, shift your attention right away to something more important, to something bright. We are all powerful we can handle the pandemic crisis. You can always make a choice to break free of suffering and panic and open to your own light. Everything is up to you. You are never alone, if you need help ask for it, it will show up.  

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Postad: 10 apr 2020 Redigerad: 10 apr 2020

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There are a lot of tips how to reduce anxiety and protect your mental health during the pandemic.

Change tips to advice.

For those people who can´t handle it or focus on something else might need extra support.

Instead of writing For those people (which does not make grammatical sense), write Individuals. Additionally, I would change can't to struggle with.

It´s never a good choice to suicide

Suicide is a noun, not a verb. Therefore, you need a "commit" before suicide.

or affect people around you or your own health.

What do you mean with these words? Perhaps, you could be a little more specific?

For my part, it is important if someone reaches out to you, listen and take it seriously.

You can leave out For my part.

It´s important when mind start move into overthinking or panic, shift your attention right away to something more important, to something bright.

This sentence is not correct. The sentence structure is wrong, and a few words are missing. I would suggest writing "If your mind starts to move toward overthinking or even panic, it is important to immediately shift your attention to something else" (it does not actually need to be important). What do you have in mind when you write bright? Something positive and uplifting?

We are all powerful we can handle the pandemic crisis.

You either need a comma after powerful, or an "and" (and fits better in the context).

You can always make a choice

make the choice suits the context better.

to break free of suffering

from, not of.

and panic and open to your own light.

How do you mean with your own light? That phrase might need an additional explanation. 

Everything is up to you. You are never alone, if you need help ask for it, it will show up.  

I would skip Everything is up to you here. Ending with just the You are never alone bit will be more powerful and memorable. Also, you need either a comma or an "and" after help. :)

Good advice, you just need to do a little bit of grammatical polishing. :)

Christopher 68
Postad: 10 apr 2020

Good advice.

I would add that, if you change 'tips' to 'advice', also change 'are' to 'is'.

elemea77 7
Postad: 10 apr 2020

Thank you very much! Jag uppskatar verkligen ert svar :) Tack för er tid!

Nice to hear! Welcome to Pluggakuten! :)

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